The charts below show the result of a questionnaire thet asked visitors to the parkway hotel how they rated the hotel's customer services. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010

The charts below show the result of a questionnaire thet asked visitors to the parkway hotel how they rated the hotel's customer services. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the result of a questionnaire thet asked visitors to the parkway hotel how they rated the hotel's customer services. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010
The demonstrated
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indicates the consequence of
a
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inquiry that asked visitors to the
parkway hotel
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Parkway Hotel
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how they ranked the hotel’s customer services .The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in two different years,2005 and 2010. Looking from an
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structure it is readily apparent, that the positive customer services like excellent and good increased in the given time frame where as the percentages of negative responses declined .
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obviously
seem
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that
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45%
visitors
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gave satisfactory answers in 2005 and
this
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was
superiority
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for
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time but in 2010 it diminished and
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witnessed
17%.Looking at more details very poor and poor indications were high in 2005
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, 15% and 21% but in 2010 they lowered and amounted to 4% and 12%.
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,
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noticeable improvement has
experienced
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in the
parkway hotel
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Parkway Hotel
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,
so that
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in 2010, 39% good
scored
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has
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were
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gained from
the
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guest
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,
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in
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the compared date that was not so satisfied with 14%

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