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The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant. The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant. The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph presents the amount of data requests at a tourist office in the UK between
january
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January
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 and
june
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June
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.
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, throughout the months, the most significant growing it was in person
following
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followed
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 by telephone.
Whereas
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 by telephone has experienced a fall.
According to
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 the figure, in person witnessed a
rapidly
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 growth. By January the number of requests
were
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was
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 400. In March, double up to 800. At
this
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 level, there was a sharp rise until June, finalizing with around 2000 requests a month. By telephone, has
experiencing
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experienced
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 a fluctuation. By February has presented a drop
around
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of around
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 100, but by March has started to increase remaining steady
between
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apply
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until April. At
this
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 level climbed to 1600.
On the other hand
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, by letter and email
has
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have
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 suffered a reduction
close
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of close
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 to 400. By March the decrease
stay
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stays
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 almost stable. At
this
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level
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level,
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 there was a
rapidly reduce
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rapid reduction
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 until May, from around 700 to under 400
where
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which
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 has
maintened
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maintained
 steady.

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