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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.
The graph provides key information about the proportion of the workforce in multiple sectors across different
countries
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 between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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 it is clear from the chart that the
jobholders
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number of jobholders
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 in Services and agriculture decreased in the
USA
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,
Japan
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,
China
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, and
Germany
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.
In contrast
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, the number of workers in Industry increased in all four
countries
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According to
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 the data the percentage of Agriculture declined in all four
countries
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 by 2010:
Germany
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 by 2%, the
USA
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 by 5%,
Japan
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 by nearly 5%, and
China
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 by roughly 20%.
However
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, the rate of Industry jobholders grew significantly in the
USA
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,
Japan
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, and
Germany
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 by 2010: with
Germany
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 at just above 20%, the
USA
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by
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 20%, and
Japan
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 at 30%,
whereas
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China
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 was stable at 40% from 1980 to 2010.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of the workers in Services sector dropped across four
countries
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 the
USA
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 from just under 50% to nearly 40% ,
Japan
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 fell to 30%,
China
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 from 50% to around 20%, and
Germany
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 by 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, usa, japan, china, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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