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Writing Samples
Band 4

In some countries, people are purchasing fewer new items and more second-hand goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

Purchasing
for
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second hand items is good
somtimes
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sometimes
 espacaily if
u
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you
 are trying to save money but not all
itmes sould
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items should
 be bought
by
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second hand use like clothes
its
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it's
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 gross to wear something you
dont
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don't
 know how
peole
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people
was
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are
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 using it.
Linking Words
At
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In
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 the
end
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end,
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i
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I
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 agree to buy second hand but not with
every thing
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everything
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coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic structure, but it is hard to follow. Try to organize your thoughts into clear paragraphs: one for the introduction, one for the reasons, and one for the conclusion.
task achievement
You mention that some second-hand items are gross, but you do not provide enough specific examples or details. Try to explain more about why certain items should not be bought second-hand.
coherence and cohesion
At times, your sentences are hard to understand due to spelling mistakes. Make sure to proofread your work or use simpler words that you are confident with.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is a good start.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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