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In many countries, foreign labor is an important part of the economy. Using migrant labor can contribute to the development of a country, but it can also cause economic problems. What are some of the advantages and drawbacks of expatriate labor for a country’s economy?

In contemporary
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society,
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 the question of foreigner workers has widely debated, whether employing immigrants may entail benefits to the local economy or vice versa. In
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 trend will be discussed. For the
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decades
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 we may encounter
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an ever
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ever growing
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 number of people travelling to various
countries
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 in order to get a job. Undoubtedly,
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 their aim of earning considerably high wages overseas, there are numerous merits for the hosting country as well.
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 development is
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its potential to delve
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 the dilemma regarding lack of labour, since
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 rate is declining and the amount of adults to hire is
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scarce in some
countries
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, by inviting workers from neighbouring
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 huge companies tend to cover its employment. Another major outcome is exchanging views and techniques
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 foreigners who are used to working with different approaches and techniques, which results in innovative solutions and a significant improvement of
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,
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 solution is not without its drawbacks, there are some potential negative consequences to consider. First and foremost is
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a risk
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 of unemployment
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 local citizens in case there are exaggerated rates of
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 workers.
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 is expected to replace
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the country’s
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 population which will lead to a competitive behaviour of employment.
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, in terms of expenses, recruiting
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 workforce is economically not profitable.
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 cost of their comparatively higher wages, perks at work
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basic needs namely accommodation and flight will cost a fortune.
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, enrolling inhabitants may be advantageous and less problematic in the long term
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, motifs for utilizing immigrants may assist
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 issues, especially if there are not enough people intending to work, yet if the number is overrated, it can cause another problem of unemployment. It is advisable for companies to consider the budget in advance.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states what the essay will cover. Use straightforward phrasing like 'This essay will discuss...'
coherence and cohesion
Try to create clearer connections between your ideas. Use linking words like 'first,' 'next,' and 'finally.'
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. Instead of saying 'huge companies,' name an example or use a general category like 'manufacturing companies.'
task achievement
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of foreign labor, which is important for the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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