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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Peter. I was a passenger
of
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the
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flight VN123 of Vietnam Airlines
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to London. I sat at the 25A seat. Unfortunately, I left a
bag
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 on my seat when I
went
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got
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out
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 the plane. I am writing
this
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 letter for the purpose of needing your help to find the
bag
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. It is a small
hand
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handbag
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bag
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with
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 white
color
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. I cannot remember all of
things
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 in it but there are some items that always are there
such
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:
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 a small
note book
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notebook
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, a pencil and some candies. In a
note book
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, you can find my address,
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email and
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mobile phone as well. If you
an
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 find the
bag
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 please contact
to
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me by
the
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email on the
note book
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notebook
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 or you can send it to Rex
hotel
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. I am very appreciative
for
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 your help to get the
bag
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 back. Kind regards, Peter

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task achievement
Your letter explains the situation well but could include more details about how to reach you.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly in paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check your grammar, for example, 'If you can find the bag...' instead of 'If you an find the bag...'.
coherence and cohesion
You have a good greeting and closing in your letter.
task achievement
You explained what happened clearly including your seat number, which is helpful.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unfortunate incident
  • Flight details
  • Distraction
  • Valuable possessions
  • Sentimental value
  • Lost and found procedure
  • Safe return
  • Compensation
  • Assistance
  • Gratitude
  • Follow-up
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