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The diagrams are the existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams are the existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the information
of
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 the art museum floors before and after development.
Overall
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, there are various changes in the diagram including
change
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changes
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 in the entrance and additional space for the gallery. First of all, the direction of the entrance which directly entered into the lobby is changed from the east to the north of the gallery located at the Parkinson Court.
Lobby
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 and office
is
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 transformed
to
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large
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a large
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 area for
education
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an education
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 area and
small
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a small
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 space is kept for
Store
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a Store
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 or plant. The Entrance through which
tourist
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tourists
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 enter in the proposed plan
consist
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 of
large
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a large
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 area for
permanent
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the permanent
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exhibition
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centre
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 which
otherwise
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 has equal areas each for
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the permananent
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permananent
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permanent
exhibition
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centre
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 and
Temporary
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the Temporary
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exhibition
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centre
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. From
this
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 Permanent
exhibition
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centre
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, there is a path which joins the special
exhibition
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centre
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 and
Exhibition
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 store
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newer
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the newer
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 map.
Older
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 map does not have any plan for
special
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a special
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exhbition
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exhibition
centre
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 and
therefore
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 it was empty. The downstairs
are
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 located from the
exhibition
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 store and can take
exit
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an exit
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 from the art gallery.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exhibition, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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