Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers.Others believe that a women's role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice

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long been regarded that
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ought to play a main role in household
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. I completely disagree and I think
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should have the
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to take up a career like men.
This
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will discuss the opinion stated.
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with, it is
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's choice on whether to find work or become housewives.
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due to
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the fact that
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have the same equality as men.
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, the mainstream should respect the
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's perspective and their own choices.
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Convention on the Elimination of All Forms of Discrimination Against
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or CEDAW,
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were free to act on their own without having to oblige to what men said.
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,
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's abilities are not the same depending on each individual.
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, they might
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different careers in their life. Some might opt for jobs
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as employees or business managers
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other
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may stick to catering at home.
In addition
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, there are
also
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gifted
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who may contribute to
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society through careers outside their
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homes
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,
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people need to respect their choices. In conclusion,
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should be given permission to follow what they like as they have the rights and may perform
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in that paths

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
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You have a clear opinion which is good.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction states your main argument well.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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