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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 email finds you in your best spirits. I'm writing
this
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 letter in
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response to the advertisement for a training course shared by HR today. I would like to share my
williness
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willingness
 to
puruse
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pursue
 for the "MS Project" course. It is a
software based
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 program, which is used by all the top companies
nower days
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nowadays
.
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, all I need is to
fianance
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finance
 the software and the program learning fee. In
additon
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 to that, I would like to have it installed
in
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 my company laptop. Which can be done through IT department approval.
Though
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 I can practice at work and use it
for
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to
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 complete my
work flow
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workflow
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. Certainly, I'm making many daily reports for our
day to day
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 operations. It will assist me to track down all my progress, In
additon
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addition
 to that helps me to create faster visual reports to present in the meetings.
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 by which
its
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aid
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to improve
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in improving
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 the productivity and
efficency
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efficiency
 of my work. Looking forward to
hear
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 from you! Please share your
valueable
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valuable
 feedback on the same. Yours faithfully Yuvraj

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task achievement
Clearly explain the purpose of the letter in the first paragraph. You did well by addressing the course, but being clearer about the reason would help.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one clear idea to improve flow. For example, separate your thoughts on the course's usefulness to keep it organized.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling and grammar errors, like ‘williness’ should be ‘willingness’ and ‘fianance’ should be ‘finance’.
task achievement
Use a clear closing statement to ask for approval. For example, you could ask directly if you can proceed with the request.
task achievement
You provided clear information about the course and its importance for your job.
suitable writing tone
You maintained a polite tone throughout the letter, which is great for professionalism.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • training course
  • skillset enhancement
  • educational leave
  • sponsorship
  • reimbursement
  • knowledge integration
  • work efficiency
  • career progression
  • continuing education
  • team contribution
  • productivity boost
  • expertise building
  • industry standards
  • hands-on experience
  • networking opportunities
  • cutting-edge techniques
  • best practices
  • return on investment
  • in-house training
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