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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph below illustrates the trend in
crime
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 rates across different
age
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 groups in the UK
last
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 year,
while
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 the pie chart categorises the types of criminal offences committed during the same period.
Overall
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, from
age
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 twelve
crime
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 rates sharply rose, reaching their peak at
age
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 twenty, followed by a significant decline in criminal activity in the late twenties.
In contrast
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, violent
crime
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 was the most prevalent category of offence
while
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 public order disputes recorded the lowest proportion of
crime
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. The number of crimes increased dramatically from nearly five
thousand
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 to eighty
thousand
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.
However
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,
crime
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 rates dropped significantly to twenty
thousand
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 after the
age
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 of twenty.
Subsequently
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, the number of crimes tapered off in older
age
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 groups to around ten
thousand
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.
On the other hand
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, violent
crime
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 constituted nearly half of all
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crime
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crimes
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 committed in the UK, reaching a total of 46%.
Moreover
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, property-related offences and drug offences comprised roughly the same proportion of the total, which recorded 23% and 22% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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