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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

2.In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measure could be taken to prevent this?

In today's world, the falling quality of environmental resources
due to
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 item production and construction negatively
affect
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affects
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 individuals' health and life expectancy. One probable solution can be residential awareness about environmental
problems
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 and developing
air
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 and
water
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 cleaners. One significant issue is that the the quality of
water
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 and
air
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 is
dicreasing
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decreasing
 significantly.Nowadays it is
dificult
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difficult
 to find a region with clear
water
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 and fresh
air
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due to
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 a lot of fabrics and
constraction
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construction
.
As a result
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, more people, especially
young
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the young
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 generation, face health
problems
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such
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 as
asma
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asthma
 or
alergic diseas
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allergic diseases
. It leads to shorter life expectancy
becouse
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because
 the living
condition
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conditions
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became
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become
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 worse.
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, in
Kazakhstan
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Kazakhstan,
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 the most popular
diseas
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disease
 is
astma
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asthma
that
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which
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 makes
individual's
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an individual's
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 life challenging because of
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the unability
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unability
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inability
 to
breath
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breathe
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 without distrubtions. One possible solution could be making projects or creating
grups
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groups
 of valontiers, who will spread
the
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apply
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awareness of environmental
dificulties
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difficulties
 and pollutin
problems
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thus
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 contributing to better
tretment
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treatment
 of
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 and
cooparative
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cooperative
 thinking about
productions
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production
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.
Anothe
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Another
 effective way to tackle
this
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 problem is developing
air
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 and
water
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 cleaners that will reduce
polution
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pollution
in some areas.
For instance
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, in some developed
contries
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countries
 with huge
industry
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industries
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such
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 as
Banhladesh
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Bangladesh
the
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apply
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water
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 filters are settled
in
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with
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aim
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the aim
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to
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of to
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 residents
contrubute
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contribute
 clean
water
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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 constructions and industry
leads
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lead
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 to well-being damage
this
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 problem can be solved by creating projects to spread environmental
problems
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 and developing
air
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 and
water
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 cleaners.

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language
Make sure to use correct words and check for spelling errors. For example, 'disease' instead of 'diseas'. Also, try to avoid repeating words like 'the'.
content
Add more specific examples and details to support your points clearly. This will help explain your ideas better.
content
You have identified a clear problem and multiple solutions for environmental issues, which is a good start.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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