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The maps bellow show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps bellow show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The map graph illustrates the changes in Kimsville
city
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 recently.
Overall
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, they
did
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made
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makeover
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a makeover
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 to the area around the
city
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center
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centre
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. they established three new
ficilities
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facilities
,
in addition
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, they replaced two places
to
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with
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another new buildings
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another new building
other new buildings
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. New buildings are established today which are
appartments
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apartments
,
train
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a train
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 station,
as well as
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football
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a football
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 stadium.
At
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In
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 the north of the
city
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centre
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center
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center,
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 new flats were
bulit
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built
.
Furthermore
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, at the west of the
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centre
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center
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center,
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 a train station was established. Just below it, a new football stadium was built as well.
On the other hand
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, the old cinema that
placed
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was placed
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at
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in
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 the south
direcation
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direction
 of the
city
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center
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centre
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 was replaced with
pub
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a pub
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. Another
replacment
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replacement
 occurred
to
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at
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 the factory which
replaced
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was replaced
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 by a software company in the east of the
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center
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centre
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.
However
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, the shopping
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center
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centre
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 remained the same without any changes.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • modernization
  • transportation routes
  • green space
  • public facilities
  • community impact
  • environmental effect
  • historic preservation
  • architectural integration
  • urban planning
  • amenities
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