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Some people think that social media platforms are useful for business and making new friends, while others think that such websites are harmful. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social media.

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 new strategies to expand their businesses and
to
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interact with
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. One of the famous
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 among
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groups
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 of individuals is social media, which is easy to
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 and comes with several other benefits but some
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oppose
 and argue that
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 it has
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 of disadvantages. Admittedly, networking websites are
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 for many companies, because of
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convience
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convenience
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use
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 and
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 their brands. Any person who knows how to
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 mobile phones can operate them
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 and can do promotions
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 their own without any assistance.
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,
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on Instagram
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, human beings can post advertisements on their public account and explain
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 about their products in a short video.
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, it is no longer difficult to make new friends, because just a click to request
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 to be their close ones is enough on the sites like Facebook and Twitter. Public stay
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 with
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 even if they are
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others
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. On the other
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, what is half full for some, may appear half empty to
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 them, it is a cause behind online scams, as hackers gather data from accounts and
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 it to get money from the banks.
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,
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artificial
 intelligence is becoming
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 and complicated
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 photographs and videos are edited by the users to blackmail many persons.
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, it is difficult to distinguish
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fake users and companies, because no one can be judged from their profiles as chiselers upload
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 data on their pages. To put it in a nutshell, using various minisites is an advantage for people if it is used by being aware of scammers. These come with abundant merits
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 as communicating with unknowns but
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 its demerits to
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recognise
 who is real.

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coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea which connects to your overall argument.
task achievement
The essay covers both advantages and disadvantages of social media.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media outreach
  • Professional networking
  • Brand visibility
  • Customer engagement
  • Misinformation
  • Digital marketing
  • Privacy concerns
  • Online presence
  • Viral marketing
  • Cybersecurity risks
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