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The world production output from Asia, Europe, and the rest of the world in different years.

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bar chart illustrates the comparison in
production
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 output between Asia,
Europe
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 and the rest of the world from 1840 to 2000. UNITS?
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, there were no stable tendencies. At the beginning Asian
production
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 was the biggest, slightly lower was
Europe
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production
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.
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Europe
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European
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production
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 had reached its top in the middle of the period, and by the
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 it became the lowest among other productions.
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,
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 rest of the world the
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 of time was lower than others. As is obvious, the
Europe
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 value had slightly risen by 10 and reached its peak equalled 50 in 1920.
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 it fell to 28 units approximately. Asian
production
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 was the highest in 1840,
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 it slightly decreased to 20 units after 80 years and became the biggest one in 2000.
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, the
production
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 of the rest of the world rose from 10 to 32 including its
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highest point
38
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of 38
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 in 1960.

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task achievement
Provide clear units of measurement for production output.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs for better flow.
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content
Some main trends and changes over the years were mentioned clearly.

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