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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart illustrates the average of the total global
population
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 in 4 different countries between 1950 and 2050.
overall
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, it is evident that
China
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was
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had
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 the highest percentage
between
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of
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 all the given countries,
while
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japan
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Japan
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was
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had
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 the lowest.
Moreover
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,
China
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 and
Japan
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 showed a downward trend throughout the years.
According to
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 what is shown in the
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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chart
that
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in
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 India in 1950
the
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apply
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population
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 was around 15%,
while
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China
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 was higher by 10%
at
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in
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 the same year. In 2002, the number of people
lived
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living
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 in both of them increased significantly around 17% and 20%
respectivily
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respectively
. after 48 years, the
population
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 will increase in India, but
China
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 will decrease in 2050.
In contrast
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,
USA
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the USA
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 and
Japan
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 showed a downward trend in the given period. In the beginning, America started with almost 8% of the universe,
while
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Japan
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 was the half.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, after 12 years, both of them declined
steadly
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steadily
 by 2%. In the future, the two countries will drop in the
overall
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 world
population
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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