Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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, no matter how
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shows a huge development,
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will always be part of it. The problem here is
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the debt
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huge or just a small amount that anyone can handle, and the reasons for people taking
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debts
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and the solution for it. Individuals sometimes
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the need
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a debt to cover the necessary expenses ,
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, covering the house mortgage or buying a house.
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some people especially the new generations started taking
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debts
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for things they don't need, they just want to prove to their peers they can have the exact stuff they do.
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, Solving a problem like
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is actually very easy . The solution is simply making young people work , When I say work it doesn't necessarily
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forcing children to find a job, to
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problem parents should not give the child everything they want without knowing why they want to buy it .
Debts
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comes
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predominantly from lack of responsibility
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being given things the child doesn't need,
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, One of your children comes to you and
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because he wants the same thing his friend has , Not because he needs it,
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will
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their adolescents and adulthood buy lack of responsibility and depending on their parents.
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, I'm not saying we should treat these kids by depriving them of toys or
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any kind of stuff a kid would love to play with, I'm just pointing out how much is it important to teach them about how
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spending
habits can affect them and if they go
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way they will be stuck with paying
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for the rest of their lives.

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You identified important reasons for debt and suggested a practical solution.
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Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

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