The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group.

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of ages in New Zealand between 2011 and 2012.

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, the total

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in the survey period tended to increase slightly,

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, there was a change between uneven ages. The

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grew the strongest

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the

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of 65 and up to the lowest in groups under 40. The

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group under 15 in 2011 was 898,160 but in 2012 only 896,364 showed that the

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tended to decrease

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in the

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of 40 had a go down in similarity with the group below 15.

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the two

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groups dropped, the

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of the group was 40 to 64 and over 65 had a minimal rise in the survey. And the

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of 65 and above had the highest climbed from 573,946 to 596,903. The data above showed that New Zealand had a high

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rate.

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The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group.

Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries it is now illigal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Many people work from home using modern technology today. Some people think that only the workers benefit from this and not the employer. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?