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In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buy their houses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

In recent times, many people prefer to rent a
house
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 rather than buy their houses for living.
This
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 essay will explore both the benefits and drawbacks of
this
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 trend.
To begin
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 with the positives, a crucial advantage of renting a
house
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 is that it more cheaper than
buy
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buying
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 it.
this
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 is because renting a
house
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 just requires monthly or
annually
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annual
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payment
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payments
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 depending on the agreement.
In contrast
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, buying a
house
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 requires a lot of money for the first payment.
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, Flexibility is
also
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 offered when people choose to rent a place
for living
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to live
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. A family can move to another apartment or
house
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 if they do not like
with
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apply
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the environment.
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, They can choose not to renew the contract after 1 month of renting because the place is quite noisy. On the downside, Contracting a home does present some limitations and problems. Some landlords often make rules for tenants to not
decorating
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decorate
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 or renovate the property.
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,
Due to
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 the rules, The tenants can not change the
utilize
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utilisation
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 and the function of the room as they want. Another significant disadvantage is the lack of stability because there
is
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are
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 no
guarantes
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guarantees
 for tenants to stay
more
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apply
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longer in the
renting
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rental
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 apartment.
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, The occupant
need
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needs
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 to relocate to another apartment if the landlord decides to sell the property immediately. In conclusion,
Although
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rent
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renting
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 a
house
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 is beneficial in terms of price and
convinience
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convenience
, it is important to consider that it
also
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 restricts
to re-construct
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 the property and there is no certainty to stay
more
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apply
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longer than expected.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but make sure they are connected to the main points. Try to summarize your ideas better in the conclusion.
task achievement
Make your main points clearer. Each paragraph should have one main point that is well explained and supported.
language use
Check grammar and spelling, especially with simple words. For example, use 'cheaper' instead of 'more cheaper' and 'guarantees' instead of 'guarantes'.
task achievement
You have introduced the topic well and stated the advantages and disadvantages clearly.
task achievement
The examples you provided help to explain your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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