Fast food is a part of life in many places. Some people think it has harmful ‎effects on lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

Nowadays,
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debate over fast
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having a harmful effect on our daily routine and healthy eating system. I partially agree with
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idea, and I am going to provide the reasons. Admittedly, the consumption of
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food
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in some cases can eradicate
people
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’s lifestyle.
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, workers who spend half of their day working behind a computer or receiving clients normally do not have
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to cook for themselves when they get home.
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,
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who have sedentary lifestyles suffer from the same problem. These kinds of
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do not strive to alleviate
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situation.
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, they order meals from McDonald’s or KFC and enjoy
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.
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,
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can avoid these kinds of problems without medical assistance. By reducing unhealthy
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, it is possible to ameliorate their daily routine. Personally, I
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love eating burgers,
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and French
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fries but it does not make any sense to my health, as
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it
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hinder my wanting and have homemade meals. As it
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, “fast
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” is
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a
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meal
which
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apply
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cooked with limited speed and we do not know what kind of
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are added to the ordered meal.
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, even if it is unhealthy, everyone except me could agree that
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food
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is incredibly tasty. That means, sometimes we can award ourselves by ordering meals from Burger
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or wherever each person likes. In conclusion, I want to mention that
harmful
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the harmful
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effects of having
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food
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depends
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on each person.
People
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who rarely eat fast
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will see less effect than those whose daily meal is
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food
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.

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Task Achievement
Make sure your points are clearly explained and developed. Some ideas are not fully clear.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and is logically linked to the next.
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Try to use stronger examples to support your points, they will make your argument clearer.
Task Achievement
You have provided a clear opinion on the topic, which is important.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a good structure with introduction and conclusion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • calories
  • saturated fats
  • sugar
  • salt
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • hypertension
  • nutrient deficiencies
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • nutritional value
  • culinary skills
  • home-cooked meals
  • long-term healthcare costs
  • environmental issues
  • packaging waste
  • carbon emissions
  • traditional diets
  • balanced meals
  • marketing strategies
  • dietary habits
  • children and teenagers
  • lifestyle implications
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