Fast food is a part of life in many places. Some people think it has harmful effects on lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.
Nowadays,
people
debate over fast Use synonyms
food
having a harmful effect on our daily routine and healthy eating system. I partially agree with Use synonyms
this
idea, and I am going to provide the reasons.
Admittedly, the consumption of Linking Words
junk
Use synonyms
food
in some cases can eradicate Use synonyms
people
’s lifestyle. Use synonyms
For instance
, workers who spend half of their day working behind a computer or receiving clients normally do not have Linking Words
energy
to cook for themselves when they get home. Change the article
the energy
Furthermore
, Linking Words
people
who have sedentary lifestyles suffer from the same problem. These kinds of Use synonyms
people
do not strive to alleviate Use synonyms
this
situation. Linking Words
In contrast
, they order meals from McDonald’s or KFC and enjoy Linking Words
it
.
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them
However
, Linking Words
people
can avoid these kinds of problems without medical assistance. By reducing unhealthy Use synonyms
food
, it is possible to ameliorate their daily routine. Personally, I Use synonyms
also
love eating burgers, Linking Words
French
fries but it does not make any sense to my health, as Correct word choice
and French
I
hinder my wanting and have homemade meals. As it Correct pronoun usage
it
called
, “fast Add a missing verb
is called
food
” is Use synonyms
the
meal Correct article usage
a
which
cooked with limited speed and we do not know what kind of Correct pronoun usage
apply
flavors
are added to the ordered meal. Change the spelling
flavours
Furthermore
, even if it is unhealthy, everyone except me could agree that Linking Words
junk
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food
is incredibly tasty. That means, sometimes we can award ourselves by ordering meals from Burger Use synonyms
king
or wherever each person likes.
In conclusion, I want to mention that Capitalize word
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harmful
effects of having Correct article usage
the harmful
junk
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food
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depends
on each person. Change the verb form
depend
People
who rarely eat fast Use synonyms
food
will see less effect than those whose daily meal is Use synonyms
junk
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food
.Use synonyms
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a good structure with introduction and conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite