The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main feature and making comparison where relevant.

The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main feature and making comparison where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main feature and making comparison where relevant.
The process chart illustrates the steps of production of
the
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ethanol
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from corn.
Overall
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, the procedure of producing
ethanol
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includes nine different stages which
starts
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from the corn and end with the
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step of transportation. After analysing, it can be seen that
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the first step is
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gathering corns and
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storing it in the second phase. The third one is, milling the corn followed by cooking it for four hours
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adding water
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cook. Once
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the corns
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corns
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corn
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cooked
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they
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for
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the process
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of fermentation for two days in the next part.
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, the chart shows that
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fermented
corns
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are being
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separated
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two parts: liquid and solid
by-product
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. In the seventh stage separated liquid
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5 hours to become purifying
ethanol
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.
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, it
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transfered
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transferred
into storage for storing the
ethanol
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in
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the container
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.
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, after
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the procedure of eight steps
ethanol
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is ready to
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into the market for use.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • local amenities
  • commercial areas
  • landscaping
  • recreational spaces
  • transportation network
  • urbanized
  • population growth
  • suburban development
  • key feature
  • transformation
  • accessible
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