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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable. Therefore, all students have to wear school uniform .do you agree or disagree?

The most important thing for a student is, to focus on their studies in the classroom
instead
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 of showing off their
clothes
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, and from my point of view, I agree that the
students
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 must have a uniform
applys
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applied
 on all of them.
Students
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 should
focusing
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focus
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 on the lessons during the classes so they can benefit from
it
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them
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 and learn new information, rather than showing their status by wearing fashionable, because if each one of them
wearing
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 a different kind of
clothes
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 the student will start to
focusing
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 on the outfit more than
the
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their studies and their exams
for example
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,
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 if the student has an exam the night before the exam they will start to think what is the outfit will
looks
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 good on me rather than studying and preparing themselves for the test. From my standpoint
students
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 should focus on learning in the classroom and not thinking about their
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apply
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clothes
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, I believe all the schools should have uniform rules
such
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 as, It is not allowed to
girls wearing
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wear
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 short dresses and they have to wear
abaya
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the abaya
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 in the classroom as a uniform,
furthermore
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,
for
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example
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 the boys most wear shirts in
a
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apply
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white and black pants so all each gender will look the same . To
summurize
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summarize
,
students
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 go to school to learn and their minds must be busy with the lesson they are taking, and not thinking about the
clothes
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 of the people around them,
this
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 is why schools should have rules about
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clothes
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the clothes
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 of the
students
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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