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The bar graph below shows the imports of electronics goods in 2000 and 2006, write it down.

The bar graph below shows the imports of electronics goods in 2000 and 2006, write it down.
The given bar chart illustrates the
import
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 amounts of electronic goods from 2000 to 2006. Units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, at the beginning of the period video recorders and televisions had the biggest values,
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however
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but
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 by the end of
of
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apply
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the observation time video recorders had only
a
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apply
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half of
previous
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the previous
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import
Use synonyms
 amount.
While
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the televisions number
Change to a genitive case
the number of the television
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 rose and still had the biggest
import
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 in 2006. Obviously, DVD players value sharply increased by 2,8
millions
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million
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 by 2006.
Radios
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Radio
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import
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 became bigger and was at 5,2 by the end of
given
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a given
the given
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 period. There was
also
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 one more tendency
showed
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showing
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 decreasing, CD players coming to the country had a slight fall from 2,1 to 1,7. It’s interesting, that televisions always was the largest electronic
good
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goods
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importing
Wrong verb form
imported
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 to the country among others from the given bar chart. The number of these electronic devices approximately tripled since the beginning of the period.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words import with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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