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The charts below give information about the purposes of travel for passengers using four different UK airports in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the purposes of travel for passengers using four different UK airports in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates key information about the expenditure of the UAE government from the total budget of 315
billion
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 during the year 2000. The units are measured in a number of billions.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that most of the budget was spent on the social and security category,
whereas
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 debt interest and the other expenditure category recorded an equivalent amount of billions.
According to
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 the data shown, social security represented the biggest slice of the pie with a significant 100
billion
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. Health and personal social services accounted for a substantial 53
billion
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,
while
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 the education sector has 38
billion
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 only.
Moreover
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, the defence expenses indicated a modest 22 million. In terms of the law and order, and the industry, agriculture & employment categories they represented 17 and 13
billion
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 respectively.
In contrast
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, debt and interest, and the other expenditure genre had a similar 23
billion
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. Transportation,
on the other hand
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, demonstrated the lowest slice of the pie with 9
billion
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 only.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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