The graph below provides the amount of books which were borrowed in four various months in 2014 from four village libraries, with the pie chart indicating the proportion of books that were borrowed over this period.

The graph below provides the amount of books which were borrowed in four various months in 2014 from four village libraries, with the pie chart indicating the proportion of books that were borrowed over this period.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below provides the amount of books which were borrowed in four various months in 2014 from four village libraries, with the pie chart indicating the proportion of books that were borrowed over this period.
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about the ratio of
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borrowed
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a given period of time in 2014. By taking a glance at the graph, borrowing
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was first indicated in the month of June,
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the quantity of said
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started increasing sharply at West Eaton and Church Mount, jumping from 50 in the first half of 2014, going up to 100 and nearly 150,
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in July and August. And
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until September. As for Ryeslip, 4 months
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on, shockingly dropping from 300 knowledge
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resources
at the
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beginning
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150
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studied period ended in September.
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Lastly
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unstable trend, with
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of highs and lows comes Sutton wood. As for
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why
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the
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and services were not well-advertised and not
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accessable
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accessible
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the reader,
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it is no surprise to the demonstrated result in the graph.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • borrow
  • books
  • month
  • village
  • libraries
  • amount
  • proportion
  • new
  • year
  • people
  • reading
  • number
  • activities
  • increase
  • decrease
  • enjoy
  • weather
  • family
  • time
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