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The chart below shows the preferred method of communication for 18–30 years old in three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the preferred method of communication for 18–30 years old in three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the line graph
illustrate
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 the preferred
system
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 of communication about 18 to 30 years old between 1998 to 2008.
overall
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,the percentage of
landline
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landlines
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increase
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increased
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 rapidly over the period.
while
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 the cellular phone service
rise
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 as compared to
fixed
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the fixed
a fixed
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system
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systems
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 and
mobile
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the mobile
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system
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systems
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had
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apply
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dramatically
decline
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declined
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.
firstly
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 the mobile and fixed
was remain
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was remained
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 constant at zero point between
the
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apply
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1998 to 2004.
although
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,these two slightly higher
at the end
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 of
year
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the year
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 2008.
scondly
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secondly
 the
internent
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internet
 service fluctuate till 2006 at 15
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percent
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per cent
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but
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it
increase
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 5
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percent
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per cent
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.
on the other hand
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 cellular
system
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was
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apply
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sharply
growth
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to
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in
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 contrast with
other
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others
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.
moreover
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,it sharply
climb
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 starting to 5
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percent
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per cent
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 and
contiously
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continuously
consciously
increase
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increased
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 over the year.ultimately the landline
system
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remain
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remains
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 constant
till15
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till 15
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percent
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per cent
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at
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from
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 1998 to 2006 and
then
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falling
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fell
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words system, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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