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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
men
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 and
women
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 holding different
levels
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 of post-school qualifications in
Australian
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Australia
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 in 1999.
Overall
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,
men
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 were more likely to pursue vocational and advanced qualifications ,since undergraduate diplomas and bachelor's degrees were the only two
levels
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 where females had a larger proportion than males.Notably the percentage of males dominated in skilled vocational diplomas was the highest across all the
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,
whereas
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 that of
women
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 was the lowest.
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men
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 account for a
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 majority at 90% in terms of skilled vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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,compared to just 10% for
women
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.
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women
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 occupied 70%of those with undergraduate diplomas,more than double the proportion of
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.For bachelor's degrees,
women
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 were slightly more than
men
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,comprising 55% compared to 45% for
men
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. It is evident that
men
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 held a larger part in higher
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,
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 over 70% of postgraduate diploma holders ,
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women
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 took up only 30%.
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,
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 outnumbered
women
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 in master's degrees,with 60% versus 40%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, levels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Skilled vocational diploma
  • Undergraduate diploma
  • Bachelor’s degree
  • Postgraduate diploma
  • Master’s degree
  • Proportion
  • Gender disparities
  • Educational trends
  • Equal representation
  • Workforce demands
  • Societal norms
  • Significant equalities
  • Dominated by
  • Reflecting
  • Opportunities
  • Implications
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