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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the proportion of males and females who held different
levels
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 of post-school qualifications in Australia
in1999
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in 1999
.
Overall
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, there was an inverse relationship between the level of academic degree and the number of recipients.
Moreover
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,
men
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 were more likely to obtain qualifications than
women
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, as they accounted for over 50% at all three
levels
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,
while
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 the proportion of
women
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 exceeded 50% at only two
levels
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. In detail, the qualification awarded to
smallest
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the smallest
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 percentage of
women
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 was
skilled
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a skilled
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 vocational diploma, but
men
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 obtained the most.
By contrast
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, the qualification received by the lowest proportion of
men
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 was the undergraduate diploma,
whereas
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 it was the most common qualification among
women
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.
Furthermore
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, the gender gaps across the remaining three
qualifications
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qualification
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levels
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 differed.
For example
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,
women
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 outnumbered
men
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 by 7% at the Bachelor’s degree.
Conversely
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,
men
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 held
an
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a
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 20% lead
at
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in
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 the Master’s degree, and the gender gap was even wider for the Postgraduate
diploma
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Diploma
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, where
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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 of
men
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 receivers doubled that of
women
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Skilled vocational diploma
  • Undergraduate diploma
  • Bachelor’s degree
  • Postgraduate diploma
  • Master’s degree
  • Proportion
  • Gender disparities
  • Educational trends
  • Equal representation
  • Workforce demands
  • Societal norms
  • Significant equalities
  • Dominated by
  • Reflecting
  • Opportunities
  • Implications
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