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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.
The line graph gives data between 2011 and 2018. In the country the number of
shops
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 that closed and the number of new
shops
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 that opened.
Overall
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, categories experienced different trends,
while
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 newly opened
shops
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 increased with a fluctuation As the graph shows, in 2011 the figure for newly opened
shops
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 started at approximately 8500
then
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, it experienced a significant decrease after a year 3000 above.
Then
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 it reached 6000 in 2014, and
at the end
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 of the
period
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period,
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 the figure for newly opened
shops
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 ended with exactly 3000 in 2013.
In contrast
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, closed
shops
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 started with 6000 above in 2011,
then
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 there was a small increase to 7000 in 2013.
At the end
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 of the year,
this
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 category experienced a rapid decrease down to 1000 in 2015, after that year the figure of closed
shops
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 returned and increased to 5000 in 2016 .
At the end
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 of the time it went with standability 5000 in 2018

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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