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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the layout of Lynwich College in 2006 and how it looks today.
Overall
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, it is evident that the site underwent significant changes which
lead
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led
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 to the increment in the pathways and
addition
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the addition
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 of amenities
such
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 as a cafeteria, a bus stop and a bike storage space. In 2006, in the middle of the
area
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, there was a path that connected with the buildings in the west and the south, and a library in the east.
This
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 pedestrian
area
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 is now utilised for a cafe which is accessed from all directions of the college. In the past, there was a vacant
area
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 which has three trees, the trees have been
cutted
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cut
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 and the space is utilised to construct a library which is adjacent to both college buildings in the west and the south.
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, in the east, there is an
area
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 for parking cars and bikes which previously served the purpose as only the slot for
car
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the car
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 park.
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, the library was first situated in the east, in between of car park and a sports field, the former is now used as a sports centre.
Furthermore
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, in the north, there is a main road, which now has a bus stop
that is
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 connected to the premises for easy access for the students.
Lastly
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, the process of renovations does not
affected
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 the trees and plants located in the north and the east.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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