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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.
The table illustrates the
praportion
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proportion
 of youngsters in cities and villages who
become
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became
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 part of different
activites
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activities
 in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, teenagers in rural
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area
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areas
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 are more
intrested
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interested
 in activities
compare
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compared
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 to urban areas in 1990 and 2010.
Major
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The major
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 difference is in photography in 1990 and in playing in 2010, where adults in rural
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area
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areas
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 are more
instrested
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interested
.
To begin
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 with, in
year
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the year
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 1990 Photography in rural
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area
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areas
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having
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had
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 double
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intrest
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interest
 at 14
percentage
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per cent
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,
while
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 other activities
having
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had
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 less than double
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the intrest
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intrest
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interest
from
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in
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 rural
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area
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areas
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.
Moreover
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, animated play having
aslo
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also
 nearly 18
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percent
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per cent
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intrest
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interest
 against 10
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percent
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per cent
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. On the other side, in 2010 reading
have
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had
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 similar
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intrest
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interests
between
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among
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 urban and rural
kid`s
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kids
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. at 78
percent
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.
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Intrest
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Interest
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 in playing is
also
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 nearly double in rural
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area
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areas
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 during
this
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 time
as
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at
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 26
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percent
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per cent
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 against 14
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percent
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
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,
in
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apply
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animated play have no difference in 1990 and 2010 in urban areas,
while
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same
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the same
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 behaviour in playing in
rural
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a rural
the rural
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area
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areas
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at
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is at
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 26
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, intrest, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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