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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015.
The line graphs illustrate the
number
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 of mobile and fixed
phone
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 line
subscribers
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 (per hundred people) in
Eritrea
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,
India
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, the
UK
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 and
Uruguay
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 from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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, mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 were more popular than fixed telephone
subscriptions
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 over a decade.
Furthermore
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, the
UK
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 and
Uruguay
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 displayed the highest
number
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 of
subscribers
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 compared to
India
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 and
Eritrea
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 with the fewest
subscribers
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. Notably, in 2013
Uruguay
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 recorded the highest
number
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 of individuals with mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 at 150 per hundred people, followed by the
UK
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 which fell short by 25.
In contrast
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,
India
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 experienced a steady rise in
phone
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 plans starting from 2009, reaching its peak in 2014, at approximately 75 per hundred.
Subsequently
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,
Eritrea
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 consistently showed relatively low numbers, averaging around 10 per hundred
subscribers
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. In comparison, the greatest
number
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 of fixed telephone
subscriptions
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 was seen in the
UK
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, standing at nearly 60 per hundred users in 2009.
Thereafter
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, numbers slowly declined
while
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Uruguay
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 remained relatively constant at 31 per hundred
subscribers
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.
Additionally
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,
India
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 and
Eritrea
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similarly
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 displayed low figures, with
India
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 slightly higher than
Eritrea
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 until 2014;
however
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, both countries dropped to as low as 5 per hundred. In summary, the data suggests that mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 were the preferred option
of
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 telecommunication.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, phone, subscribers, eritrea, india, uk, uruguay, subscriptions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subscriptions
  • mobile phone
  • fixed phone
  • increase
  • significant
  • rise
  • stable
  • pronounced
  • contrast
  • decline
  • steadily
  • highest
  • gradual
  • dramatic
  • usage
  • general
  • surpass
  • end of the period
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