With a great variety of social networking websites, people often add complete stranger s to their lists. Do you think that this tendency helps people to find new friends or it's just a mean to increase their self-esteem. Justify your opinion with relevant examples.

Many hold the view that adding
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persons to their list is
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to know
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new
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,
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argue that
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adding strange
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is just to
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and
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their self-esteem. In
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I will discuss both perspectives and present my own.
People
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often attend to adding strange
people
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to their list
social
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networking websites to find new friends. There a different types of lists based on the platform,
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people
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share their
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according to
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their
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and find someone
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same
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the same
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interests.
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, my friend is
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shy in real
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and she
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that building
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herself is so hard and complex for her, so finding
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and friends on
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more easier than in real
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her take her own time to know and understand other person before meeting him in real
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.
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adding
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stranger
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is sometimes helpful
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in finding
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friends.
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, some
people
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argue that adding
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stranger
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to their
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list
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completely
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their self-esteem by making them follow their
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life's
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. To clarify,
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people
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following
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the
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famous and important
people
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because of their content and knowledge like scientists.
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, there
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person who
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good content but
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stranger
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people
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to become famous, the
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don't like him because he
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just to impress
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without
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them.
To
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conclusion, adding
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stranger
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strangers
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is have
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has
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different
impact
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and consequences either to increase
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or to help shy
people
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.

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Task Response
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. Present both sides of the argument clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use clearer topic sentences at the start of each paragraph. This will help the reader follow your main ideas better.
Language Accuracy
Check your grammar and sentence structure; some sentences are hard to understand. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and article use.
Content
You provided personal examples which help to illustrate your points. This makes your essay relatable.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social networking
  • geographical boundaries
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • professional aspirations
  • communities
  • perspectives
  • cultural exchanges
  • empathy
  • global awareness
  • self-esteem
  • validation
  • quantity vs quality
  • superficial relationships
  • emotional support
  • companionship
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