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Band 5

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people would rather adapt to
climate
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change
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 than put effort into preventing it. I totally disagree with
this
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 point because
climate
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change
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 is irreversible, and it has a greater
impact
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 on the next
generations
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. One of the essential reasons we need to work on the prevention of
climate
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change
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 is that it cannot be reversed later in life.
Climate
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change
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 is accompanied
with
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 various unwanted side
effects
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, which are
permenant
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permanent
 and extremely hard to
change
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.
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, the increasing temperature is expected to melt the ice of the
north pole
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, leading to floods all over the world
endangering
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and endangering
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 humans' lives. Another significant reason is the
impact
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 it has on the proceeding
generations
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.
Although
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 we might not experience the
effects
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 of
climate
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change
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 now, newer
generations
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definetly
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definitely
 face them.
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 because the
change
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 causes a gradual
impact
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 on the environment, so its
effects
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 would only be apparent in the following years. If nothing is done now to prevent
climate
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change
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,
next
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generations
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 will be negatively affected by it.
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, in certain poor villages in
India
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India,
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 the rates of death have
icreased
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increased
due to
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 heat strokes caused by the high temperatures that reach 55 to 60
celsius
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, and if
it
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they
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continues
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 to rise, the results will be
detremental
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detrimental
. In conclusion, Some people believe that getting used to
climate
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change
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 is better than trying to prevent it. I completely disagree with
such
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 an idea
due to
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 the negative
impact
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 it can have on new
generations
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 and how irreversible these
effects
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 are.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction. This helps the reader understand your point of view from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words between sentences to improve flow. Words like 'firstly', 'however', and 'for example' can help.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to strengthen your main points. This makes your argument more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You present strong arguments about the irreversibility of climate change and its impact on future generations.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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