Over the last few centuries, people have ceased using many languages and allowd them to be forgotten. Some predict that this trend will continue all people speak one global language. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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,
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as English or Spanish, are widely spoken in
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of countries. Thanks to
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range of spoken regions, these
languages
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consistently have demand
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to
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learn.
In contrast
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, there are
languages
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which are unpopular and these
languages
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have a common feature: the number of
speakers
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are
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not sufficient to be spread. In
this
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essay, I don't agree
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the view that the
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of
languages
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will be replaced by one global
language
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. On the one hand, some argue that
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some
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languages
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have been endangered
due to
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the invasion of foreign
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. From imperialism in
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19th century and mid-20th century to globalisation
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nowadays,
such
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external
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has
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have
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been
spreaded
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spread
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worldwide. During these consequences, some
speakers
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have been both directly and indirectly forced
ta
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to
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change their first-order
language
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. Some
authorites
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authorities
have forced these
people
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to learn external
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, or trends in
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the global
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era have induced them to absorb foreign
languages
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.
For instance
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, Taiwan, which had been colonised by Japan for almost
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half century
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, still has lots of
japanese
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speakers
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in
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nowadays since they had been strongly influenced by Japan in
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period
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.
On the other hand
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,
people
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speaking their own
language
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are trying to prevent the extinction of their
mother-tounge
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mother tongue
. Usually,
people
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trying to protect their
languages
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from external trends
have
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proud of their spoken
language
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. To illustrate
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,
Korean
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Koreans
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have less motivation to be accustomed to foreign
languages
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since they consider their own
language
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as the most superior
language
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in the world, in terms of history, grammatical structures, and unique characters of Korean.
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shows that there are always
people
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who are indifferent to foreign
languages
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, or even neglect every
language
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outside their home country.
For
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this
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reason, many
languages
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will not
dissappear
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disappear
and coexist with other major
languages
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in the future. In conclusion, I believe that traditional
languages
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with an effort of preservation will not
dissaper
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disappear
since
speakers
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of
such
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minor
langauges
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languages
mostly have confidence
on
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in
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their
language
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.
Although
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global trends
make
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pressure to learn foreign
languages
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to these
people
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, they still enjoy speaking
with
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their
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own words
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.

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Task Achievement
Make sure your ideas are clear and supported with specific examples. Avoid general statements that do not add depth to your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clearer structure in your paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a main idea that is easy to find and follow.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for spelling and grammatical errors to improve the overall quality of your writing. For example, "languages have a common feature: the number of speakers are not sufficient" should be corrected to "the number of speakers is not sufficient."
Task Achievement
Your discussion of local languages and global influences shows a good understanding of the topic.
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You made a valid counterargument about people wanting to preserve their own languages, which adds depth to your essay.
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