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The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.

The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.
The provided charts compare the percentage of British
students
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 who were able to speak other
languages
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in addition
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 to English in 2000 and 2010, at one university in England. It is obvious from the charts that within a decade,
students
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 with other
languages
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 either they were increased or still steady. Starting with those who did not have another language, the percentage of them had dropped to half in 2010. Followed by
students
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 with the French language, the proportion of them had lost one-third by 2010.
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, two types of
students
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 remained steady in
their
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popularity:
students
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 who have the ability to speak in German and two other
languages
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, the percentage was 10%.
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, the most popular language was Spanish, which
presented
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represented
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 30 per cent of
students
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 in 2000, and it surged by 5% in 2010.
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, those who had two
languages
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also
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 increased by 5 per cent the proportion had reached 20 per cent by 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • students
  • speak
  • languages
  • ability
  • English
  • illustrates
  • increase
  • importance
  • multilingualism
  • global
  • reflecting
  • focus
  • historical
  • learning
  • indicating
  • shift
  • educational
  • priorities
  • diversity
  • access
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