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The bar chart on the right gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart on the right gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key information about the ratio of international and local
students
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, for both males and females learning computer science. From 2010 to 2012.
Overall
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, it is clear from the given graph that the number of British
students
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 had the highest percentage throughout the period.
In addition
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, males from other countries showed a significant rise from about a fifth in 2010 to nearly 40% by 2012,
whereas
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 international female
students
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 had a steady increase of 14% in 2010 reaching a quarter approximately in 2012.
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 what is shown, local women
students
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 rose significantly around 20% to reach
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maximum of 45% in 2011,
while
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 local men experienced a sharp decline in 2011 falling to a fifth.
However
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, by the year 2012, the values for both British men and women taking that course reached their peak of under 45%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number
  • students
  • studying
  • Computer Science
  • increase
  • significant
  • lowest
  • highest
  • period
  • trend
  • popularity
  • courses
  • year
  • recorded
  • interest
  • growing
  • few
  • reach
  • peak
  • comparison
  • feature
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