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The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
develpments
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developments
 which took in a
costal
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coastal
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area
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 of Australia over 75- Years and
period
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the period
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 between 1950 and
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the peresent
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peresent
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present
.
overall
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, it can seen that the
comparisions
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comparison
 of roads to connect between south and north
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area
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areas
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 is the most substantial
develpment
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development
. In 1950, the beachfront
area
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 was mostly natural with few buildings. There used to be a small park on the beachfront, which has now been replaced with more commercial
bulidings
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buildings
.
notally
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notably
totally
, the access to the beach has improved with new paths and roads but the natural
beautly
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beauty
 has been affected.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, the
restaurent
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restaurant
 is erected
baside
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beside
 the surf club in the southwest
area
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. the number of trees and green spaces has decreased as more land is used for development.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beachfront
  • area
  • natural
  • buildings
  • changed
  • constructions
  • hotels
  • apartments
  • park
  • replaced
  • commercial
  • trees
  • green spaces
  • decreased
  • development
  • access
  • paths
  • roads
  • natural beauty
  • affected
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