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You have recently moved to a new neighborhood. You want to recommend a local restaurant to a friend who will be visiting you soon. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Describe the restaurant and its location. Explain why you recommend the restaurant. Suggest a time when you could go there together.

I am writing
this
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 email to talk to you about a significant experience
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restaurant in my new neighbourhood, I recently discovered it . I walked to the restaurant and did not need a car or any transition. To elaborate, the restaurant is in front of my house . 
Moreover
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, it is famous for Italian food. I was recommended pizza and pasta it was very delicious. The cheese and tomato sauce were much on the pizza
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answer
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 the question of why I like it. Let me know when you are coming to my city in the summer . I will take you to try it with me and rate it. I know you love Italy food
especially
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 pizza. All the best Rimas

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coherence and cohesion
Try to have a clear beginning, middle, and end in your letter. Each paragraph should focus on one idea.
task achievement
Make sure to use a friendly tone. You can add more personal touches to connect with your friend better.
coherence and cohesion
Correct the grammar and punctuation; for example, 'I walked to the restaurant and did not need a car or any transit' is better stated as 'I walked to the restaurant, so I didn't need a car or public transport.'
task achievement
You shared your personal experience of the restaurant well, which helps build excitement.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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