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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic gives us information about how patients
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 three different hospitals evaluated their services.
Overall
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, Peveril
Centre
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 had the best punctuation being
response
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 to
concern
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concerns
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, Booking appointments and Doctor’s
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service
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services
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 the best services.
Longston
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Langston
Centre
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 was evaluated with the
least
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lowest
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 rate being
Response
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 to
concern
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 the worst
service
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. Marchbank
Centre
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 had
higher
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a higher
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 rate than
Longston
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Langston
Centre
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 but lower than Peveril. Peveril
Centre
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 had the best services with an average of 8.3.
Response
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 to concerns, booking appointments and Doctor’s
service
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 had the best punctuation by patients with 9.6, 9.1 and ,8.7 respectively. Marchbank
Centre
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 had an average score of 7.2, having Doctor’s
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service
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Service
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 the best rate with 8.4.
Pharmacy
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The pharmacy
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 had bad punctuation with 5.8. As regards
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Longstong , it was the
Centre
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 with the worst qualifications with an average of 5.8. Booking appointments, Even the patients ,Pharmacy, and
response
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 to concern were the worst
service
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 with 5.2,5,1 and, 4,3 respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, response, service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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