The table below highlights data on the number of travelers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below highlights data on the number of travelers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below highlights data on the number of travelers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table indicates three major German airports'(Dusseldorf,
Frankfurt
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and Berlin Tegel) travellers from 2007 to 2012.
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, all three airports
had
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significantly increased the number of
airport
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visitors during these five years and
Frankfurt
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had the most
visotors
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visitors
in 2007 and 2012
..
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.
...
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First of all,
Frankfurt
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airport
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had the most
foreigner
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foreigners
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, 36.5
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millions
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million
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people, who landed in
this
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airport
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. It had a stable trend
which
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with
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the figures
are
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going upward and had a
dramatically increased
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in 2012
by having
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69.2
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millions
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million
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visitors.
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, Berlin Tegel
airport
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had a relevant trend to
Frankfurt
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airport
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but remained stable from 2010 to 2012 which had 43.3
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millions
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million
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visotors
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visitors
.
Although
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remaining stable, it is still in
last
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place
comparing
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compared
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to both of the places.
Lastly
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, Dusseldorf
airport
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had some
high
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highs
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and
low
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lows
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but reached
to
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its peak in 2009 which had 48.2
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millions
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million
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travellers and was the most among the other two places. The trend slightly decreased in the following two years but increased
12.4
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to 12.4
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millions
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million
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in 2012.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words frankfurt, airport, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • travelers
  • airports
  • number
  • data
  • years
  • growth
  • figures
  • compare
  • significant
  • change
  • total
  • trend
  • high
  • low
  • peak
  • overall
  • summary
  • features
  • noting
  • between
  • state
  • three
  • shown
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