The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommdation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommdation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommdation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
The bar graph gives the proportion of accommodation
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that
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English and Walish
people
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owned and rented from 1918 to 2011. In general, renting properties was the most popular
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in
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the first half of
20th
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the 20th
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centery
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century
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In addition
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, rented
household
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households
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decreased significantly,
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the figures for owned ones increased sharply.
Initially
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, individuals in England and Wales hit a peat at around 78%. After that, the number of rented
people
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went down strongly to about 50% in 1971.
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, at the beginning of the period,
people
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who owned houses stood at about 22%. It
then
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rose strongly to nearly 70 % in 2001 after reaching 50%, which is the number equal residents who rented accommodation in 1971. From 1971 to 2001, the rate of renting houses continued to drop to 31%. The owned ship showed a different pattern. It rose to nearly 70% in 2001.
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, in the
last
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decade, it saw a slowly increasing trend of
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ones around by about 5%.
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, the rate of owned
people
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reduced from around 70% to approximately 65% in the same period in the areas.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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