The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram
illustartes
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illustrates
a line chart with the participants
of
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in
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activities from 2000 to 2020 in
melbourne
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Melbourne
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,Australia in
same
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the same
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social centre the chart shows the highest line which is the film club have a lot of fans, but it
stil
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still
from 2000 to 2020 there is no big change. the second one is
the
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apply
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martial arts until 2015, after that table tennis
go
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went
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up,
however
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from 2000 to 2010 is lower than
the
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apply
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amater
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amateur
dramatics, but it
is going
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went
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down from 2005 to 2020 which is the lowest
participant
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activity in 2020. and the table tennis from 2010
increase
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increased
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from 20
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participant
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participants
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to
approximatly
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approximately
55
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participant
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participants
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.
lastly
Linking Words
Noticing the musical performances the participants begin in 2005 to 2020 there is a change increasing in
this
Linking Words
activity. the highest
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participant
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number of participants
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in order
is
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apply
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first the film club, second table tennis,
third
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apply
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martial arts
forth
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fourth
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muscial perfotmance
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musical performance
, and
lastly
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is
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apply
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amateur dramatics for 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participant with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • activities
  • social centre
  • popular
  • decline
  • increase
  • trend
  • interest
  • introduced
  • participants
  • peak
  • creative
  • physical
  • compared
  • features
  • summarise
  • reporting
  • period
  • changed
  • growing
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