Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Do you agree or disagree .

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it is more advantageous to
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live in a big city.
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it is a commonly held belief that
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to live in a small town, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that
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Make sure to clearly state your main idea in the introduction. Your viewpoint is not completely clear.
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Use simple linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to organize your ideas better.
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Add more examples or reasons to support your opinion. This will make your argument stronger.
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You started with a clear opinion about living in a big city.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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