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The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country between, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000.

The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country between, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000.
The given graph gives information about the manufacturing of forest products which are called timber, pulp and
paper
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 in European
country
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countries
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 between 1980 and 2000
years
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.
Overall
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, the
paper
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industry
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 followed an uninterrupted upward trajectory.
To begin
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 with the pulp
industry
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, in the initial half decade it hit a low of about 2
million
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of
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tones
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tonnes
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 after that period, there was an immediate recovery. During other
years
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, industrial production showed a more modest upward trend. In
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last
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years
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, there were sold almost 10
million
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tons
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 of pulp.
Moreover
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, the line of timber grew from four
million
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tons
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 to 10
million
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 but
this
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 peak was not maintained. From
1985
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the 1985
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 year, production
followed
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was followed
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 by a minor fall and a subsequent rise. Between 1990 and 1995
years
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 of stability and in the
last
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 year, it experienced a marginal increase to 10
million
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tons
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. When it comes to
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paper
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the paper
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industry
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 which was commonly used by European companies, at the beginning of trade, it sold
with
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4
million
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tons
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 a year, and between 1980 and 1990
years
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 of stability, from 1995,
paper
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 experienced a marginal increase to eight
million
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tons
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. In 1995, it
followed
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 by a minor fall and a subsequent rise. Coming to
the
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2000, it followed by
a
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steady and consistent growth and it was a peak maintained. Altogether, almost all lines adhered to
rising
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the rising
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 trend. Albeit to varying degrees,
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paper
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the paper
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industry
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 dominated.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, years, industry, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stability" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginal" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Timber production
  • Pulp production
  • Paper production
  • Fluctuations
  • Steady growth
  • Technological advances
  • Demand
  • Market demand
  • Sustainable practices
  • Deforestation
  • Production levels
  • Comparisons
  • Trends
  • Policy changes
  • Patterns
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