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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their salary ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their salary ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives us pieces of different data about the number of households in the US by the salary
income
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 in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
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 the most annual
income
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 of the number of households in 2015 is $100,000 or more.
Firstly
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, we see a huge increase
for
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in
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 the $25,000 to $50,000 and $50,000 to $75,000 annual
income
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 between the
year
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 2007 and the
year
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 2011 going from around 25
million
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 to almost 30
million
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 in the
year
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 2011.
Secondly
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,
in
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from
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 2011 to the
year
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2015
Add a comma
2015,
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 it was
big
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a big
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 increase
for
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of
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 $100,000 or more going from around 25
million
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 to more
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then
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than
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 30
million
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.
Finally
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, the $50,000 to $75,000 annual salary saw no changes for about 8 years being slightly above the 20
million
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of
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apply
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US householders.
Overall
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, wealth inequality seems to be increasing, as fewer households are in the lower
income
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 brackets by 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • households
  • income
  • salary
  • chart
  • number
  • most
  • earned
  • between
  • middle class
  • drop
  • possibly
  • economic downturn
  • households
  • higher incomes
  • started
  • rise
  • economy improved
  • trend
  • faced challenges
  • recovery
  • overall
  • inequality
  • increasing
  • fewer
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