International sporting events are costly and bring problems to the hosting country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Hosting regions faced ample

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economical

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concern

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concerns

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owing to organizing World Wide sports events. I partially agree with

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statement in which points will be quoted in the forthcoming paragraphs. Why organizing World Wide games are much

expensive

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? Certainly,

economical

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challenge

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challenges

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one of the major reasons

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for

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this

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phenomenon.

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, building stadiums, upgrading infrastructure and accommodation

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players need massive investment as

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agenda is a big concern among hosting nations.

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, managing funds is a (difficult) complex task for them.

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this

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, another one is security and safety for athletes and visitors as well from either terrorism or crime. These aspects

also

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require handsome expenditure,

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not only

population

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can safely enjoy the sports events but

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sportsmen can play efficiently without any issue. There are several reasons

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which

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the first and foremost is

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the revenue

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handsome amount. To elaborate, in

present

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time, almost

nations

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all nations

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get huge

advantage

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advantages

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from OTT applications as people watch these kinds of live events on their E-gadgets from which sponsors earn billions of profits.

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, it shows

lucrative

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effect on them.

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this

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, another reason is job opportunities.

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due to

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enhancement

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of tourism in hosting regions,

unemployment

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the unemployment

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rate goes down.

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massive

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a massive

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number of individuals get jobs which is advantageous for them.

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, a study

had

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done by

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the university

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university

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of Edinburg in 2022 which revealed/ disclosed that approximately 46% of

unemployment

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the unemployment

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rate

got

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was

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mitigate

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by providing employment factor to

local

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community in

Philippines

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the Philippines

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, there are two aspects of

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topic; its agree point, providing security can consume huge investment; its disagree point, online tickets and OTT apps exhibit fruitful impact on hosting nations.

akn.sagar

Jul 2, 2025

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and provide a strong conclusion that summarizes your main points.

Coherence and Cohesion

Use clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader through your ideas.

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Try to support your ideas with more examples and details to strengthen your argument.

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You show awareness of both sides of the argument, which can make your essay more balanced.

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Some examples you provided, like the effects on unemployment in the Philippines, are relevant and illustrate your point well.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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283 words

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