Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sport to young children). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

A segment of society believes that unpaid
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services
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as working for charity and
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improving
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should be
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integral part of senior education,
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few
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will discuss both
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views and give my
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opinion
at the end
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. To commence with,
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services
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may help
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to develop practical skills and gain real-world experience.
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communicating with
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and needy
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, the
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get to know more about culture,
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values and foster empathy with which they can promote teamwork to improve a society as well
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country as
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.
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,
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get a sense of responsibility to give back to society
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taking care of the old people and helping the needy.
On the other hand
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, these mandatory
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put a lot of pressure on the
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as they
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cope
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with the academic homework and regular exams to score good marks.
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,
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are facing a big burden of homework that they are not able to indulge in physical activities
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have no time for family.
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, adding more responsibilities on
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will
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definitely
have negative impacts on their mental and physical health.
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the end,
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think
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services
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are pivotal for the growth
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country but
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have a lot of pressure
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schools ,so they should devote their time
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studies
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their studies
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unpaid community service
  • Compulsory
  • Philanthropic activities
  • Civic engagement
  • Give back to society
  • Empathy
  • Social awareness
  • Real-world experience
  • Detracting
  • Autonomy
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Volunteering
  • Teamwork
  • Neighborhood improvement
  • Mentoring
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