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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph illustrates the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in the top ten countries in 2014. The data is measured in billion kWh.
Overall
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, the United States ranked second after China in of
production
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 and usage of
electricity
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 nationwide,
follow
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 by other countries like Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea respectively. Surprisingly, Germany was the only country where
electricity
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has been more
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 consumed at slightly below
than
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apply
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520 compared to
the
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apply
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production
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just
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 above 580 in the mentioned time.
Also
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, Russia had
the
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 difference
around
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 19 billion kWh between
production
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 and
consumption
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 which is the lowest difference compared to any other country.
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, the United States had the highest difference between their
production
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 at 4099 and
consumption
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 at 3866.
Furthermore
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, Japan and India have their
production
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 of
electricity
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more
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 than 930 and 850.
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, the
consumption
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 is less than 860 and 690 respectively.
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, countries like France, Brazil and Germany have around the same rate of
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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