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The first chart shows the percentage of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks(cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart shows the percentage of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks(cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of males and
females
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 who are involved in four types of housework and the average
time
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 each gender spends on them per day.
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,
women
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 consistently outnumber
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men
 in all home tasks, both in participation and
time
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 spending. The most notable difference can be seen in cooking and cleaning. Looking first at cooking,
females
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 topped the chart with around 80% participating,
whereas
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 only about 60% of
men
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 were involved.
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 identical pattern can be observed in cleaning, where about 70% of
women
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 do
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 task compared with
men
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 to just 40%. The same disparity persists in the average
time
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 spent, with
females
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 spending nearly 90 minutes on cooking and 70 minutes on cleaning,
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 slightly greater than
men
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.
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, when it comes to house repairs, the gap becomes noticeable in favour of
men
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. Around 20% of males participate in
this
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 task, albeit at lower levels for
females
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, who make up
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a mere about 10%. In terms of
time
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,
men
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also
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 spend more on
this
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 activity. Pet care shows a similar amount of participation between both
women
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 and
men
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, with slightly greater involvement from
women
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, time, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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