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Two charts below show the percentage of qualified graduates in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Two charts below show the percentage of qualified graduates in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate and compare the majors that students choose in a specific country in 1980 and 2008.
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masters
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science
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 was the most popular.
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, it decreased over the 28-year period, and almost all of the other
specialties
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 had the same step. Upon initial observation, we will observe that in 1980,
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masters
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science
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 was the most significant, comprising 29%, which made it the leading category. Followed slightly by
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first
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degree
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arts
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, accounting for 25% of learners.
Masters
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 and
PhD
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 made up a mere 12% and 2%, respectively.
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First
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degree
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PhD
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 of
science
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 had 19% and 13% of the chart. Turning to 2008, it can be seen that
studing
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studying
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masters
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science
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 maintained stability, with 29%.
In contrast
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PhD
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science
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 saw a dramatic rise to 30%, making it achieve the
first
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 place. Followed by
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masters
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 and
first
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degree
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arts
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, with 13% and 11%, respectively. Meanwhile,
PhD
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arts
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first
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first-degree
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degree
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science
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 had 7% and 10% of the percentage.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words masters, science, first, degree, arts, phd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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