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The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of instant noodles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Process Steps with Key Details Storage Silos: Flour is stored in silos (starting raw material). Mixing: Flour is combined with water and oil in a mixer to form dough. Rolling: Dough passes through rollers to create flat dough sheets. Cutting: Sheets are cut into thin dough strips. Noodle Disc Formation: Strips are shaped into circular noodle discs. Cooking & Drying: Discs are cooked in oil, then dried. Seasoning: Vegetables and spices are added to flavor the noodles. Packaging: Noodles are placed in cups with labels. Cups are sealed for preservation. Final Product: Labeled, sealed cups of instant noodles are ready for distribution.

The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of instant noodles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Process Steps with Key Details Storage Silos: Flour is stored in silos (starting raw material). Mixing: Flour is combined with water and oil in a mixer to form dough. Rolling: Dough passes through rollers to create flat dough sheets. Cutting: Sheets are cut into thin dough strips. Noodle Disc Formation: Strips are shaped into circular noodle discs. Cooking & Drying: Discs are cooked in oil, then dried. Seasoning: Vegetables and spices are added to flavor the noodles. Packaging: Noodles are placed in cups with labels. Cups are sealed for preservation. Final Product: Labeled, sealed cups of instant noodles are ready for distribution.
The sequence diagram describes the process of instant
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 manufacturing. The
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noodles
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 creation is a lengthy process of
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eight
 steps. From storing flour to
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labelling
 the product, all are described in the illustration. At the
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 the flour is stored in silos. From there it is mixed with water and oil to make
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 sheets. The
dough
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 sheets are made by rolling the
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 in through rollers, after which, the sheets are cut into
dough
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 strips.
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Until
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 step the
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 is still raw. From
dough
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 strips the machine manufactures
noodles
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 discs, which is the first stage which can be called a form
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. The discs are
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deep fried
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 in cooking oil.
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 the
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 are dried and the packaging procedure begins. They are put in cups with vegetables and spices.
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 the cup
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 are labeled and ready to consume.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles, dough with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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